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The reading proposes that a box of photographic negatives from the 1920s probably belong to the the famous landscape photographer Ansel Adams. However, the lecturer in the listening material disagrees, claiming that the evidence given in the reading is not convincing.
Firstly, the reading points out that some of the negatives feature landscapes known to have been filmed by Ansel Adams. For instance, one of the negatives depicts a large pine tree leaning downwards on a cliff, and it is known for sure that Ansel Adams has taken photos of the tree. However, the lecturer points out that the leaning pine tree is in fact a famous landscape attraction. Thousands of visitors came to admire the leaning pine tree every day, and numerous photos were taken by different photographers. Therefore, the negative of the leaning pine tree can not serve as a solid proof.
Secondly, regarding the handwriting on the negatives, the reading claims that those handwritings resemble those of Ansel Adams' wife, who might have assisted her husband in organizing his works. However, the lecturer refutes this assumption, pointing out that there are several obvious spelling mistakes in the place names. Ansel Adams' wife grew up in the neighborhood, so it is very unlikely that she would make such mistakes on something she should have been so familiar with since her childhood.
Finally, the reading points out that several negatives are damaged by fire, which might result from the famous fire broke out in Ansel Adam's photography studio. The lecturer refutes this theory, emphasizing that the fire damage could be caused by the dangerous chemicals in the process of filming the negatives. In fact, the chemicals used back in the 1920s are so dangerous that it is very easy to start a fire, and many negatives of other photographers have similar marks of fire damage.
In conclusion, the lecturer believes that the reading's statement is unsupported, that the evidence is insufficient to determine that the negatives belong to the famous landscape photographer Ansel Adams.
Gimini 老师点评：
- 原始分 (Raw Score): 4.0 - 4.5 / 5.0
- 转换分 (Scaled Score): 27 - 28 / 30
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Gemini老师范文
The reading passage present several argument to support the claim that a box of photographic negatives discovered at a sale was created by the renowned landscape photographer Ansel Adams. However, the lecturer finds this argument unpersuasive, and contends that the evidence is insufficient to attribute the negatives to Adams.
First, the reading states that the negatives features a famous leaning pine tree famously photographed by Adams. The lecture challenges this by explaining that the tree is a well-known landmark in a National Park. Since the park attracted thousands of visitors in the 1920s, numerous photographers took picture of this specific tree. Thus, the image is not unique to Adams.
Second, the reading claims that the handwriting on the envelopes resembles those of Adam’s wife. The lecturer refutes this by pointing out spelling mistakes in the place names. Adam’s wife grew up in the neighborhood and knew the area intimately. It is highly unlikely that she would misspell the names of locations she had known since childhood.
Finally, the reading cites fires damage on the negatives as proof, linking it to a fore in Adam’s studio. The lecturer clarifies that fire damage was common for photographers at that time. To be more specific, the chemical used for developing negatives were highly flammable. Thus, instead of unique to Adams, fire damage of this kind can be found in many photographers’s work at that time.
In conclusion, the lecturer effectively casts doubt on the reading’s claims, arguing that the similarities are coincidental or common in that period.
